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This was great!
And I’m actually impressed with your range of movie scene memories
The sister knows now what’s up
Wonder if she’ll use that knowledge later

Loved this. I was also impressed with your detailed knowledge of the 2 movies re-enacted. I have to know the ages of the siblings please. I know the sister is older. It would put the story more into perspective for me.

This little bit of male with male arousal, while main action is girl with boy, is intriguing.
It suggests at least one character can end up liking boys and girls. It does happen.

Can't wait to find out what happens at the school physical, and what happens at Barry's house.

Game 4: Chapter 6


“I can’t believe this actually worked!” Lisa said excitedly, and I couldn’t help but agree.

“I wish we got to see Ben naked in person, but we will get the chance with the next game.” Emily then said, with a slightly rueful smile.

“Yeah, but we still got to see everyone else ...

I did notice the genital check comes first.
Any boy who gets an erection while behind the screen, will be forced to go through the rest of the medical check while the girls watch.

What is that screen made of, and how easily could it be knocked over?

My comments are not about disliking the story, just how the structure of writing could be better.

There are no paragraph breaks to separate different actions.
Multiple quotes from different characters are on the same line of script.
It all makes your story more difficult to read than it could be.

I'm bumping this story because it concluded six weeks ago.

I know I'm not the only one hoping for something new. Please...Please...Pretty Please.

Glad that you were inspired by my story.

i like what you did with it.

It's a fun read, and you should keep posting stories, but maybe take on a bit of the constructive criticism below, as it will help you become better at writing, and more people will enjoy your stories.

Like others have said ...

I do hope we are going to get details of Amanda and Barry carrying out the genital examination. I can imagine the 2 of them sat fairly close to each other during the examinations and perhaps asking the other for an opinion. Such as Amanda examining a boy and saying to Barry: "I'm not sure whether ...

(Here’s a cute little EUM story I just wrote for here and DA, enjoy!)

*Sigh...* This happened last night and I'm still turning red just thinking about it...

So about a week ago, I had offhandedly mentioned to a coworker that I was looking to go out with someone. Ever since I moved here for work ...