Pantsing and Stripping Forums

Why post the whole story again? Just post your comment.

Yes, sorry, it was my fault. I'm sorry! I have edited it


Thank you, and it's okay. i think i did the same thing, at one point as well, as i didn't realise i was quoting the entire chapter of a story.

So it's all good, and i appreciate ...

The dares should be fun to see.

Great story and I like the idea of strip penalties. The icing on the cake was when the girls showed up and took pictures of the naked boy, front and back!

My comments are not about disliking the story, just how the structure of writing could be better.

There are no paragraph breaks to separate different actions.
Multiple quotes from different characters are on the same line of script.
It all makes your story more difficult to read than it could be.

Glad that you were inspired by my story.

i like what you did with it.

It's a fun read, and you should keep posting stories, but maybe take on a bit of the constructive criticism below, as it will help you become better at writing, and more people will enjoy your stories.

Like others have said ...

I really like this idea. Fynn needs to get his comeuppance in a future chapter.

Finally the pain had subsided.

Two weeks after getting out of hospital following a knee operation Tommy was starting to feel better.

Tommy was 18 years old, 6 foot and a lean but muscular 185 pounds. A very successful youth and amateur boxer, Tommy had offers to go professional but had decided on ...

Great story was hot fun and curious what revenue he will get

I find stories like this really hot hope you do other similar style

Prologue:

Stephanie was a quiet 18 year old and a typical nerd, glasses, blonde hair tied in a ponytail and dressed extremely conservatively. However, unlike her outward appearance, she had a wild mind with an obsession of seeing someone of the opposite gender naked. Due to her quiet demeanour ...