NYSC 2022 - Pool Trouble
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Re: NYSC 2022 - Pool Trouble
An enjoyable story! Some inconsistencies, such as her breasts going from 'average tits' to 'admittedly flat boobs' to 'firm tits bouncing' over the course of the story, but that didn't detract too much from the story being a fun read overall. I would have actually been happy to see you linger over the story a bit more, particularly when she was stuck in the pool with no bottoms. You're obviously a good writer, so don't be concerned about taking your time over future stories, even if it does take a little longer to get the chapters out.
Great first submission!
Great first submission!
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Re: NYSC 2022 - Pool Trouble
Thanks for pointing this out, I actually went back and edited out the flat part, not sure why I added that originally.jimmythehand wrote: ↑Sun Jan 30, 2022 2:19 pm Some inconsistencies, such as her breasts going from 'average tits' to 'admittedly flat boobs'
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