So it looks like I’m back and have even got my writing mojo in gear somehow! Turns out creating an updated archive and people telling me how great I am (99% of the reason I’m back! Sorry I can’t help it I’m a slut for compliments) has encouraged me to start writing again.
I have decided to take a lot of the pressure off myself and be happy with shorter, less ambitious stories than I used to write as I’m sure you’ll agree any story is better than none!
I’m currently working through a lot of my older unfinished bits giving them conclusions or rewrites where needed. No current plans for my bigger stories but time will tell.
The problem child story - Jade’s Terrible Summer
So I can’t remember how many chapters I actually posted of this story on the old board originally. It was supposed to be another epic comparable to “I’m not a little girl”. I actually wrote loads of it but didn't post it all due to my missgivings with the story. The origional chapter 1 can still be found here: https://www.getdare.com/bbs/showthread.php?p=967567
The story started out with Jade, our young protagonist from the city spending her summer at her conservative Grandma in the country. The story started with her getting a bit naughty and swimming in her underwear before being caught. The story had a lot of these streaking / freedom without clothing themes that I liked and felt different from my other work. However this jared with the rest of the story of typical stripping, bullying, public humiliation that the country girls put her through.
The main problem with the story was ‘the twist’ a few chapters in after saving her tormentor from public humiliation they became friends and went on some streaking adventures together. However this didn't work! The humiliation piled on Jade earlier just didn't make sense for this to work in the context of the story. The pacing was also all over the place. “I’m not a little girl” has some of this problem too but this was worse. Chapter 2s humiliation was extreme and then 3 a bit less so and 4 was actually quite fun and light hearted.
Original story outline
- Chapter 1- Caught swimming in undies
Bulliedteased and forced to streak
- Chapter 2 - Forced to play a horrible confession game.
Stripped to underwear in front of boys
Tickled to the point of wetting herself
Made to swim in underwear leaving her soaked and exposed
Tortured with bugs and stinging nettles.
- Chapter 3 - Tied to a fence post awful game number 2
Stripped to underwear in front of boys
Tortured with bugs
Mud thrown at her
Wedgied to show off her bottom
- Chapter 4 - Forced to steak to town in underwear and vest only
Running through the village over walls
A few boys briefly see her
Loses vest on a fence
Other 2 girls (her former bullies) forced to strip by neighbourhood bullies
Knickers rip slightly + gets given a Tshirt by a random boy
All 3 streak (embarrassing but exiting)
Main bully gets ambushed and bra stripped off by some rivals
Jade rescues her before her knickers can be stolen too
Jade gives her bully the Tshirt to cover up once they are safe
- Chapter 5 - - Not written but planned - Jade and her Former bully are friends now
Naughty streaking adventure
Swim naked togeher
- Chapter 6 - Jade and her Former bully are ambushed by meaner bullies
Both are tied up naked at local park
Two similar stories from parallel universes. I’m just working on fixing up the chapters now but effectively these will be split with some things remaining the same but totally different chapters and finales.
SPOILER WARNING BELOW
- Stop reading now if you don’t want the outline plot to be spoilt below.
Jade's Humiliating Summer Vacation
- 1. Caught swimming in undies (teased, bullied, blackmailed to uncover)
- 2. Strip game 1 witches confession (less humiliation than first draft, keeps vest on no wetting herself but still shameful and embarrassing)
- 3. Strip game 2 tied to fence (pretty much same as first draft but through in mud)
- 4. Forced to play out in her childish underwear, stripped to knickers only
- 5. Stuck in a storm shelter overnight with only her tormentors. Naked humiliation games tie up games
Jade's Embarrassing Summer of freedom
- 1. Caught swimming in undies and vest (teased, made to streak slightly)
- 2. Rough housing ended up covered in mud gran hoses her down (girls only)
- 3. Forced to play out in her childish underwear, girls take her streaking to town, girls also end up stripped to underwear. Jade saves older girls
- 4. Sleepover, Girls enjoy streaking fun, swimming naked together
- 5. Girls take their streaking game too far and get caught by neigboruhoor roughians, tied up butt naked at the park.
I'm not sure if I should rename the girls in one story or if it'll work with just keeping them the same? Happy for readers input on this idea.
With Love SDS xx