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The secret of your future is hidden in your daily routine. - Mike Murdock
More Therapy – Chapter 19
I woke up the next morning snuggled up with Chloe and Dr. Crowe stroking my head. It was comforting to be cared for like that. Sophie appreciated it to as she nuzzled close to Dr. Crowe and rested my head on her bare breast. My heart skipped a beat as I was unsure if we were about to be punished. But instead of lashing out with anger at her private space being intruded on, Dr. Crowe smiled down at me and continued stroking my head.

The beautiful moment was interrupted by my stomach, which chose that inopportune moment to make a loud rumble. “Good morning, Sophie. Are you hungry?” Dr. Crowe said in a chipper voice.

In a moment, Sophie and Chloe were out of bed and scampering for the door. We made it to the kitchen, but Sophie headed to the front door. I felt the pressure on my bladder while Chloe and Sophie waited impatiently to be taken for their morning walk. Dr. Crowe had followed us downstairs. I heard her in the kitchen, seemingly unaware that we needed desperately to go outside.

When Sophie turned to go see what was taking Dr. Crowe so long, I heard the door lock click. Sophie turned around excitedly to see Josh walk in. “Is that you, Josh?” Dr. Crowe called from the kitchen.

“Yes, Dr. Crowe.” He said.

“Please walk the girls while I fix breakfast.” She called back.

With that, Josh had gotten our leashes attached to our collars and took us for our morning walk. The neighbors had gotten used to him walking me around the block each morning wearing nothing but a collar and leash. When I say ‘gotten used to’ I mean that they now all managed to go for their own walk at the same time to see the naked teen girl being led through the streets. Men and women came out to gawk at me. I have no idea how many cell phone photos were being shared, but so long as Josh was there, none of them tried anything more than take a photo.

Sophie was oblivious of the attention we were getting. If someone wasn’t specifically interacting with her, she seemed content to ignore them. Both Chloe and Sophie did their business and Josh headed back to the house. As soon as Josh had unleashed us, Sophie and Chloe sprinted to the kitchen for breakfast.

I felt a brief shock rush over me as I realized that Dr. Crowe was still naked. Josh was equally shocked, based on the redness of his face. “Sorry!” he blurted out. “I didn’t mean…”

“What’s wrong, Josh?” Dr. Crowe asked.

“You’re…” He pointed at her and trailed off in astonishment.

“Naked? You already saw me naked before.” She said.

“For a second.” Josh protested. “I didn’t look, I swear.”

“It's okay, Josh. You can look.” She said calmly. Then Dr. Crowe adjusted her stance, spread her legs slightly and cocked her head to the side as she studied Josh’s response. When Josh didn’t move, she continued her explanation. “I’m trying to gain some insight into Annie’s situation.”

“What do you mean?” Josh said, finally approaching Dr. Crowe, now staring intently at her body. For a mature woman, Dr. Crowe was rather stunning. She was in her late 40’s, but her breasts were as firm-looking as mine. She was petite, with no tattoos or other imperfections. Her nipples were redish-brown round disks that looked completely proportional to her small breasts. My guess is that she would have a hard time filling out a B cup.

Between her legs, I could see her labia peeking out behind a well-trimmed bush that reminded my of how I looked when I was 13 years old. I could see as Josh took all of this in while Dr. Crowe continued talking.

“School starts next week. My plan right now is to let Annie attend in this state. As a doctor, I think that this is the best way to help Sophie heal. As a woman, I wonder if I am doing the right thing for Annie.” Dr. Crowe said. “Josh, no. Look at me, please.”

“I’m s-s-sorry.” Josh stammered.

Sophie looked up from her food bowl in time to see that Josh had turned away from Dr. Crowe and seemed to be hiding his crotch with his hands.

“I had no idea how shy you were around women.” Dr. Crowe mused. “Perhaps when you are done bathing Sophie, I’ll have you give me a bath as well.”

Josh looked terrified. “Bu… I.” I could see it now. Josh had an erection and was trying not to let her see. A sudden pang of jealousy flashed through me. He sees me naked every day, and he sees her one time and is suddenly aroused.

She let out a laugh. “It’s okay, Josh. If you need to go take care of that first, then…”

Josh’s jaw nearly hit the floor from what she was insinuating. He looked back at her one more time and slowly nodded. Josh went into the bathroom and turned on the fan. When he returned a few minutes later, he was sweaty; but looked a lot calmer.

Dr. Crowe had taken her seat at the table and Josh sat next to her while they continued talking. Sophie and Chloe had finished their breakfast and curled up on the floor between Josh and Dr. Crowe.

“When you start school next week, Sophie will get the chance to interact with Annie’s former classmates. My hope is that this interaction will help bring Annie back out to the surface. If that works, then Annie will be aware that she is running around the school naked. Considering her sense of modesty, this should give Annie the fighting energy she needs to regain control.” Dr. Crowe said calmly.

Josh nodded along while she spoke. “But won’t Annie be mad at us for exposing her like that?”

“Probably furious.” Dr. Crowe agreed. “But my bigger concern is how she will cope after she has regained herself.”

Josh gave me a concerned look before asking, “What’s gonna happen to Annie?”

Dr. Crowe put her hand on Josh’s wrist for reassurance. “Don’t worry. Annie’s going to be fine. But as a woman, I need to experience what she is going through as best I can. What is it like to be deprived of clothes day after day? I need to experience that for myself for a while so I can understand better how to treat her when she comes back to us. Do you understand?”

Josh hesitated for a moment before nodding, “I think so. So you’re going to the office like… THAT?”

Dr. Crowe pressed her lips to a tight line for a second and she thought through the question. Finally, she decided, “Not today. I don’t think I’m so bold as to go outside the whole day like this. Today I’ll work from home.”

Josh nodded. “So you don’t need me today?”

“Need you? Of course I need you today. Who else is gonna walk Sophie and Chloe? Besides, I need to see my patients. This whole week I scheduled virtual visits until I get used to the idea of treating my patients like this.”

I was amazed that she was putting herself through all of this just to learn how to treat me when I had regained control. I truly admired her commitment to her patients, to me in particular. Dr. Crowe had opened up her home and taken me on as a ward. Now she was putting herself in the same humiliation situation that I was in just so she could gain a sense of empathy.

The rest of the week passed with Dr. Crowe remaining naked the entire time. The only thing I saw her wear was a long jacket when she went to work the first day. Presumably, she took it off when she got to the office. The next day, when Josh showed up to take Chloe and I for our morning walk before breakfast, Dr. Crowe insisted on accompanying him, this time without the jacket.

Up until then, she had not realized that all of our neighbors were lining the streets each morning to get a glimpse of the naked girl as Josh took me around. “Is it like this all the time?” She asked Josh, quietly.

Josh explained how, as word spread of his schedule, the neighbors all seemed to want to see Sophie go for the morning walk. It’s usually quieter in the afternoon.

Many of the neighbors, cell phones in hand, took more interest in Dr. Crowe than they had in Sophie. Nobody said much more than “Good morning, Dr. Crowe.” For her part, she merely smiled and gave a brief nod. She dared not engage, lest she’d have to explain her nudity to the entire neighborhood. Since nobody asked, she just kept walking.

I was astonished as Dr. Crowe found a soft patch of grass on the side of the road to relieve herself on. She really was going all in on building empathy for me. After she had finished, she had a satisfied expression that she had learned something. “Josh, would you mind walking with me to the office before heading back home?”

Josh agreed and we all headed back the way we came, passing by the outside of the house before heading the rest of the way to the office. Dr. Crowe thanked Josh for accompanying her and went inside. We spent the rest of the day at the park, Sophie was getting very good at following Josh’s instructions, and even when Josh was out of sight for an hour, Sophie never panicked.

Dr. Crowe made it home in time for dinner. Josh stuck around and ate with us. I always got excited at dinner because I knew that bath time was next. Josh was now very used to washing Chloe and Sophie. He had become very skilled at keeping my pubic area smooth and shiny. His fingers rubbed on my wet pussy as he manipulated the area to not miss any stray hairs almost always made me cum.

“I think we’ll skip that part when you wash me.” Dr. Crowe said through the bathroom door. Josh about jumped out of his skin, he didn’t realize she was standing behind him. He tried protesting, he still was not THAT comfortable with her nakedness. She insisted that she needed to endure as much of what Sophie endured for Annie’s sake. Josh reluctantly agreed and proceeded to wash Dr. Crowe while Chloe and I headed downstairs to play for a while before bed.

After Josh left for the evening, Chloe, Dr. Crowe, and Sophie all crawled into bed for the night. I was a bit taken aback when I realized that Josh had indeed shaved Dr. Crowe’s pussy after all. Did he make her cum as well?

We cuddled together as we fell asleep. The next rest of the week, after breakfast, Dr. Crowe went to the office alone and without her jacket. Josh spent the days training with Sophie and continued giving Sophie, Chloe, and Dr. Crowe a nightly bath.

I had lost track of the days, so when the morning came that Josh didn’t show up, and I saw Dr. Crowe getting dressed, I was a bit confused. It wasn’t until we arrived at school that I realized my summer vacation was now over. Sophie was about to be introduced to my classmates.
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Re: Extreme Therapy - Book 1 Complete Book 2 Chapter 19 Posted (Sept 1st)

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Ok, so I've started reading More Therapy and I'm currently on chapter 3.

So far I'm really enjoying it. There's a lot that I like and one or two things I'd change. I really like how Annie acts like she is vulnerable and traumatised, because well, she absolutely has been traumatised. I like how her body language does in fact reflect that in terms of not being able to make eye contact much and general signs of depression/self esteem issues. (Though I'd love to see so much more of that throughout)

I also just enjoy Annie's personality and spending time with her overall. I like how Craig is her sort of knight in shining armour and the dynamic those two have. Her parents are nice, and it's always fun when the girl's parents/siblings, especially male family members, witness her naked such as the mall scene.

I like the mental health angle that you've taken and how you lean heavily into that. Never can have too much of that imo, but then you know that I enjoy darker stories such as this. (Though I still love light hearted stuff too. It's just nice to have a darker story such as this as they are rare) Moments where Annie is literally trembling is great, as it shows that she's extremely anxious about her entire situation and once again adds another layer of vulnerability.

I'm currently at the point where the Dr. got Annie to strip when she has to pee and really enjoying all of that so far. (Peeing can be fun and erotic so long as it doesnt go overboard like people pissing on each other lol. A girl wetting herself for example or having to per in front of an audience such as Annie had to is always fun to read)

As for things that I would change, I do like the whole - Sophie/Annie - situation, but instead of Sophie completely taking over and Annie seems to cease to exist, I would much rather Annie often be present during the Sophie take over. Moments where Annie has moments of extreme mortification due to what Sophie... or Annie... however you want to put it Lol.

Perhaps Annie drifts in and out of control whilst being Sophie. When she's walking around nude, she suddenly is aware of her surroundings and nearly screams from just how deeply embarrassed and horrified she is. The mall scene would have been so much better had Annie, as well us, the readers, experienced a lot of what Annie/Sophie was going through.

If when Sophie takes over Annie blacks out and only gets told what happened later, it detracts from the whole "embarrassed naked female" trope hugely. I do like Annie's "trigger" though, where seeing herself naked triggers Sophie to come out.

Also, as much as I'm enjoying the scenes where Annie is blindfolded a d nude in the Dr's office, when Annie says that's she's not particularly bothered or embarrassed, it totally contradicts how she has acted in the past, as well as, again, detracts from the enf aspect. Definitely would like to see Annie mortified every time she's exposed in any way. I really enjoyed the moment between Annie and Jenny, the young girl though. It was quite a cure moment, where a girl younger than Annie is fully dressed whilst Annie isn't was a nice touch.

One more thing I'll add is that I'dlove to see Annie getting very aroused when exposed. Like a sort of reluctant exhibitionist.

Lastly, in terms of constructive criticism, I wouldn't want to see that Annie is simply naked all the time. Like I mentioned in the "mute girl" thread, her being fully nude in front of an audience as much as possible sort of desensitizes you to Annie's exposure and embarrassment a bit, and makes "upping the ante" harder to do.

Like I say, perhaps moments where she has to remove her underwear with a very short skirt on, or even a shirt that doesn't cover her lower half, thereby making her bottomless, as well as other situations like it would help. Though, again, don't worry too much about her being fully nude often too much, as a naked girl will never not be hot lol.

Granted, I mostly base that last paragraph on book 1, where's totally nude all the time. I'm not very far into book 2, so the last part doesn't necessarily apply to book 2. (So far)

Overall, I am actually really enjoying it! Maybe even more than book 1 in truth. I'll add more as I continue reading of course, though I've run out of time for now. I'll likely continue tomorrow.

Thanks for writing this btw. I'm thoroughly enjoying Annie as a character. She's got quite a cute, pleasant personality in spite of her trauma.
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Bucket wrote: Thu Sep 05, 2024 7:16 pm Ok, so I've started reading More Therapy and I'm currently on chapter 3.

So far I'm really enjoying it. There's a lot that I like and one or two things I'd change. I really like how Annie acts like she is vulnerable and traumatised, because well, she absolutely has been traumatised. I like how her body language does in fact reflect that in terms of not being able to make eye contact much and general signs of depression/self esteem issues. (Though I'd love to see so much more of that throughout)

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Overall, I am actually really enjoying it! Maybe even more than book 1 in truth. I'll add more as I continue reading of course, though I've run out of time for now. I'll likely continue tomorrow.

Thanks for writing this btw. I'm thoroughly enjoying Annie as a character. She's got quite a cute, pleasant personality in spite of her trauma.
Thank you for the thoughtful feedback. As you said in another thread, it's a rather long read. I won't comment too much of your observations now, as most of them are answered in the remaining chapters. Take your time. I am hoping to wrap this story up in 3-4 more chapters as I have already decided how it ends. I just need to get there.
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So I'm currently in chapter 6 and still enjoying it quite a bit.

Reading through book 2, I can see why you gravitated towards the mute girl thread, and the more I read, the more I genuinely think you'd be the perfect writer for said story.

Annie, having gone through (and still going through) the trauma she's had to endure, and the mute girl, I call her Sarah for whatever reason, ocassionaly thinking about the hypothetical story, have so many similarities and situational parallels, yet there's more than enough differences to makes a fresh, original story with the same vibe as this.

Seriously, the more I read of book 2, the more I think you're absolutely tailor made to write the mute girl story. I sincerely hope to see you write it, though as I say, I don't want you to feel obligated to do so. (Though I am totally trying to pressure you into it, hint hint, wink wink 😂 )

Anyway, chapter 4 and 5 were good, but more from a storytelling stand point. Chapter 6 However is where it starts to become a great deal of fun!

I enjoyed Annie waking up naked, where clearly  boys where involved and did... something to her. Annie waking up with unevenly shaved pubes was a very fun touch and even a bit hilarious, and speaking of touch, perfectly set up a reason for someone to touch her in her most intimate place which I loved. Plus shaved is always preferable aesthetically speaking.

The Dr. touching her there and making her wet/horny was incredibly perfect, and the Dr. even noticing and pointing out that she's wet was very erotic, as was Annie absentmindedly playing with her breasts and the Dr. scolding her for it. SO much more of that kind of thing throughout please. Or at least I hope. I would highly recommend leaning into that a tremendous amount going foward. (Granted, there's plenty more story left, so perhaps you do in which case ignore this lol)

Annie remaining wet and horny throughout the day was excellent, and loved how patients/parents noticed. Also, I know I said it's preferable that you shake things up a bit in terms of Annie being fully naked all the time, (I'd still love a bottomless scenario, as a bottomless girl is always hot) and for the most part I still stand by that, but when the Dr. commanded that Annie remained nude whenever she's in the office, it kind of bypasses that.

It sort of makes it more... I don't know, structured? Like a sort of "naked at home" type instruction that makes the whole thing much better and there's not really any desensitization. Does that make sense? It works well, so kudos.

Josh then making an appearance and implying that they absolutely did do "something" at the park is excellent, and It not only leaves you wondering wtf they did to her, but also is in itself quite erotic.

The dog collar is a kinky nice touch too, so really liking that.

And that's about all I have time for atm. I may return a smidge later if I have tine and simply edit this to add more points, or perhaps just create a new post.

REALLY liking this more than book 1 I will say, and I don't know why I put it off. Definitely would love to see a lot more moments like where the doctor is touching Annie and Annie getting aroused and stays aroused throughout the day, though again, if that's where this story is headed, ignore this.

One last point that I'll mention that I forgot to earlier is that the doctor touching her down there, albeit as an innocent act, adds an element of lesbian/reluctant lesbianism that was quite erotic. Perhaps that's not entirely what you were going for, but regardless, it worked and was great fun nonetheless!

That's me done for now lol. Appreciate the excellent story you've given us so far!
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Chapter 7 was a lot of fun, and I thoroughly enjoyed the boys playing with Sophie/Annie.

A decent amount of eroticism, and overall just a fun read. Sophie peeing in front of the boys was fun too. Like I say, peeing scenes can be great so long as it doesn't get too weird.


Chapter 8 was also quite enjoyable with Heidi finding Sophie and Sophie feeling so relieved. (Despite Heidi being one of her tormentors and the reason she's in this terrible situation) Sophie freaking out before being found was a rather cute moment too.


Chapter 9 was very enjoyable.

The shower scene was very nice, especially the small details such as the way Annie/Sophie was enjoying the doctor's touch so much that when the Dr. pulled away, Sophie... or Annie... however you want to put it lol, thrust out her pelvis in a desperate attempt to get the Dr. to continue. That was a nice touch. I also like the cute puppy dog persona Annie has as Sophie.

Btw, Annie experiencing what Sophie is doing rather than just blacking out is so much better, so I'm very glad you took that approach.

Though as I mentioned before, I'd really like to see Annie experiencing extreme mortification on a constant basis when she's Sophie, or even when she's not and she's just nude/exposed. She doesn't seem too bothered being nude which detracts from much of what makes this story so good.

Being nude and touched in public has to bring with it the "embarrassed nude female" theme. This story would benefit enormously from it.

 The only thing I'll add to that is since Annie essentially is Sophie, it'd be nice to see Annie experiencing what Sophie is feeling to a certain degree. For example, when Sophie got frightened by the hairdryer, Annie also gets terrified of the hairdryer simultaneously rather than simply notice that Sophie is scared.

Here's where I have to point out something I didn't like. I really wasn't a fan of the Dr. getting naked with Sophie. In fact, if I'm honest, I just pretended like she was dressed whilst Annie wasn't.

With that said, I think that's a bit more of a personal preference really. I definitely much prefer the "only one naked" aspect of this story...well most if not all stories really. A bit of another naked/semi naked girl is ok on rate occassions though.

I hope that's not particularly harsh. Whenever I point out things I didn't like, I feel like I'm being a bit harsh. Just know it's coming from a good place.

Parading Annie around nude in her own school was incredibly fun, and I know I've talked about "desensitization" when she's nude all the time, but so far in book 2, you've actually made it work quite well.

One more quick thing I'd like to add is for the benefit of this being an erotic story, I'd love to see moments of Annie masturbating, or perhaps someone else masturbating her to orgasms. (Since Sophie doesn't know what masturbation is lol) Moments where either Annie is very aroused and can't do anything about it and she just remains horny for an extended period, or where can and does, or someone does it for her. Just a suggestion.

That moment in... I think it was chapter 6, where the doctor literally made her wet and horny was exceptionally appealing.


Chapter 10 is great, though considering Annie is walking blindfolded and nude in and around a mall, she'd be so ludicrously embarrassed beyond words can describe, but I suppose I covered that already, so won't touch upon that again for now.

The police officer stopping Annie for a cavity is extremely hot, if not quite unrealistic, but don't  worry about that at all, as most of these stories need you to suspend your disbelief, so no issue with that in the slightest. Wouldn't have minded a bit more of a detailed cavity search If I'm being honest. 😅

The hospital visit I enjoyed, and brought about a little bit of that "dark" element that I like.

And then there's the bath scene with the doctor which I really loved. Very erotic, and even though the doctor's presence makes it somewhat of a professional setting, it once again added that lesbian theme which was fantastic and I loved how it made Annie so aroused.

The doc scolding her again for her body's reaction was once again great, and It almost makes you think "just let the poor girl get some sexual release already" 😂 It's almost like the doctor is inadvertently edging her lol, and I actually really like that. Again though, I just imagined that the doctor was wearing a bikini, as like I say, it's just a personal preference that Annie remains the only one naked.

And that's where I'm going to leave it for now, though I'll likely return for a bit more reading a bit later.

One final thought that I'll add quick is although a very submissive (preferably petite) female protagonist is very much my kink, I think it's fair to say from reading other's comments on this site that it seems to be the kink of the vast majority of readers here.

Sophie is of course submissive for obvious reasons, but I'd love to see Annie herself become a lot more submissive. Perhaps Sophie's absolute willingness to obey blends into Annie's personality, so even when Annie isn't Sophie, she's still a very submissive young girl.

Just my two cents. ☺

(Apologies for the ridiculously long reviews btw lol)

Edit: Forgot to add that I also loved this part:

"As I lie there, thinking of the way she had just touched me, I began touching myself the same way. I had never masturbated before, but even though it felt really nice to do, when I was done, I was longing for her to touch me one more time. It just felt better by her hand is all"

The fact that she's never masturbated before gives her an innocence and naivety that I loved and found very cute and endearing. She never even got to orgasm, which means she's now inadvertently edging herself. 😂

I guess that means that she's never experienced an orgasm before? That in itself is hot as hell.
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Hooked6 wrote: Sat Sep 09, 2023 9:01 pm For a different perspective many readers like it when girls take advantage of other girls and don't consider that "horrific" at all.
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Re: Extreme Therapy - Book 1 Complete Book 2 Chapter 19 Posted (Sept 1st)

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Alright, so it's been a little bit since my last post about More Therapy.

I've been wanting to properly sit down and binge read it, but I've just not really had the time recently. I has some time on Thursday, but my all time favourite story here had a few new chapters I had to catch up on. However, I have been reading it here and there when I've had the time, and I'm now up to chapter 19.

Certainly not the best way to read it, as taking the time to binge it is so much better, but you asked for my thoughts, and I wanted to try and give you as much as I could as soon as I could given the the time I had.

I've not written notes as I've read along, but I will say this: I've actually really enjoyed reading this tremendously. Everything leading up to chapter 19 is great! I find both Annie and Sophie acting all cute all the time is really nice, Sophie being cute because, well, she's a dog, Annie being the cute, enjoyable human that she actually is.

There has also been a lot of fun erotic moments throughout. You say you're not good at writing the erotic side of things, but I beg to differ. You're great at it! The doctor that penetrates Annie with the device was wonderful, though I'd love to have seen a lot more of that. I would just add a bit more detail to the erotic scenes and make them last longer.

That moment where Josh leaves Annie...or Sophie alone with those guys and they grope her, its incredibly erotic, though I would have loved to have seen more, as well as more of her pussy being involved. Granted, I know that the guys are basically sexually abusing her at that point, (which I don't mind at all btw. As you know, I enjoy the dark themes within stories) so I totally get why you toned it down a bit and took the approach that you did. Maybe if Sophie trusts someone, she'll let her touch her there without the biting?

I would love to see her groped at school though. Or at least scenes that lead up to loads of moments of eroticism. The upcoming school situation has me eager for the new chapters!

Btw, I know that I've mentioned that Annie remaining naked all the time can desensitize you to her humiliation and overall plight, but really, you've handled it very well. You really have. Sure, shaking it up such as "kinky dares" type scenarios such as removing her underwear with a tiny skirt, bottomlessness etc would be nice, but it makes sense why she's outright naked all the time given Sophie dislike of clothing, and again, you make it work do well.

Book 2 is definitely so much better than book 1. You've grown as a writer since book 1, and took what worked then and improved on basically every aspect in book 2. The only thing I sort of... not disliked, but kind of wasn't really feeling was when Sophie started talking. It almost made her feel like Scooby Doo.

You seemingly have retconned that? If so, I prefer that you've removed that. It almost made her feel like she was mentally handicapped rather than a dog, so it kind made me feel bad for reading about her in erotic situations. 😕

I'm trying to think of something I know I'm forgetting.

Oh, the situation with Josh being in charge of Annie/Sophie is phenomenal. There's so much potential there for so many erotic moments between them! That moment where he commands her to lay down (or was it "lean foward"?) and she raises her ass up in the air whilst bending over, giving Josh a very... well, graphic view of her - that was really hot stuff. Would love to see much more of that kind of thing.

I really look foward to reading chapter 19, as well as the coming chapters. I'll read it a bit later, perhaps next week. Maybe there'llbe another chapter by then? 😃

Really enjoyed this and can't wait for more! (As well as mute girl whenever that arrives. Sorry, couldn't resist bringing that up haha)
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Bucket wrote: Sat Sep 14, 2024 7:04 pm ...
The only thing I sort of... not disliked, but kind of wasn't really feeling was when Sophie started talking. It almost made her feel like Scooby Doo.

You seemingly have retconned that? If so, I prefer that you've removed that. It almost made her feel like she was mentally handicapped rather than a dog, so it kind made me feel bad for reading about her in erotic situations. 😕

...

Really enjoyed this and can't wait for more! (As well as mute girl whenever that arrives. Sorry, couldn't resist bringing that up haha)
I really appreciate your feedback and am happy to hear that you are enjoying the story so far.

As to the talking Sophie part, this bugged me also. One of the reasons it has taken me so long to finish was because I could not figure out how to send Sophie to school. At that point in the story, I had started going down the path that would have had Sophie and Annie essentially merging into the current narrator... I ended up deleting two chapters (one of which I had published and a second I deemed unreadable) in order to change course.

I do feel like writing this story has been helpful for me to become a stronger writer. That was why I started posting on this site to begin with. This community has been a very good place for me to experiment and find my voice as a writer. Based on your feedback, I think you will like where the Mute Girl story goes. It will be significantly darker than this one. I will probably post a sample chapter in the other thread so you can give feedback if the tone is too off-putting, prior to my posting a new story here...
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edithdick wrote: Sat Sep 14, 2024 8:09 pm
Bucket wrote: Sat Sep 14, 2024 7:04 pm
You're welcome. I'm more than happy to help. Feel free to ask for any further feedback/bounce ideas with either this story or the mute girl one.
Based on your feedback, I think you will like where the Mute Girl story goes. It will be significantly darker than this one.
You have no idea how much I love to hear that! As someone who loves the darker stories and themes, this is music to my ears. Plenty of my favourite stories have themes such as suicide/suicide attempt, self harm, trauma etc. Particularly trauma.

My mind kind of automatically assumes that this mute girl's trauma is from sexual abuse, especially if you went with her being found naked on the side of the road, but do whatever you feel is right. Ambiguity as you mentioned also works well too.

Edit: I'm still trying to figure out exactly how quoting works when it's out of order, so screw it, I'll just copy and paste the the beginning part of this response, because I'm imbecile it would seem lol:

"You're welcome. I'm more than happy to help. Feel free to ask for any further feedback/bounce ideas with either this story or the mute girl one."
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Re: Extreme Therapy - Book 1 Complete Book 2 Chapter 19 Posted (Sept 1st)

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edithdick wrote: Sat Sep 14, 2024 8:09 pm
Bucket wrote: Sat Sep 14, 2024 7:04 pm
I will probably post a sample chapter in the other thread so you can give feedback if the tone is too off-putting, prior to my posting a new story here...
You know, I should have asked, otherwise it's going to drive me nuts - Do you know approximately when you'll post that sample chapter? No pressure whatsoever. It's just, you've now gotten me ridiculously excited to read that chapter! :lol:
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