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[TeenFan]

The family going into the restaurant is only two sentences long. This is strangely rushed. Does the staff not react to seeing three naked
teenaged girls? The dining room is well occupied, but nobody says anything? They just order food and leave.

The two creepy guys at the road stop is written out nicely. With the restaurant there seems to be something missing.

[Danielle]

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[student]

Mother leads by example!

[TeenFan]

I can see the action happening the minute the "Nudie people" departed the restaurant, as the wait staff rush over to wipe the four chairs
the women sat upon, furiously scrubbing away with cloths and cleaners.

I have seen naturist videos of groups of people indoors. Many of them carry small towels with them. Whenever one needs to be seated, the
towel goes down first onto the chair or bar stool.

[Freesub]

In an optimistic mood, the premises of course is great and the girls are embarassed.

But in a pessimistic way, it is overly long winded and the motivations of the characters make little sense.

Unfortunately a far too large percentage of ENF stories using AI assistance end up in the "Empowered Naked Female" instead of embarassed which basically kills my interest in a story on the slot

[Danielle]

"Empowered," I strive for that outlook. Once the embarrassment passes, it's just skin exposed to everyone's eyes.

As for the seat covers at the cafe... I thought about that, but in the context of that point in the novel, it would take away the shock of the whole ordeal for the three teens.

[TovaG]

As for the seat covers at the cafe... I thought about that, but in the context of that point in the novel, it would take away the shock of the whole ordeal for the three teens.

I'm glad you didn't put in the seat covers. They are a staple of nudists, but the girls are not nudists. They are being punished, so they will not have known about the towels. I think it would have taken away some of the realism of the story.

I was surprised when the mother chose to strip naked as well. Not many women would have done that. It really shows her love and support of her daughters.

You have done a great job of developing the characters, but the world building is a little thin.

I enjoyed the new chapter. Keep up the effort to expand this story. I look forward to reading it.

[barelin]

Small details of this novel were that it was being told from the mind of a twelve-year-old boy. That is the youngest of the three older sisters and a very naked.

[Danielle]

Chapter 5: Badlands Theology


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[student]

Is female nudity going to be a permanent feature in that family? Almost sounds like it.