What Sam Saw - NEW 17th June

[NickTwisp]

Indeed, it has a great plot development coupled with the constant suspense over whether Sam will get caught.

[NudeBaG]

Sam now kind of ‘owes’ both Charlie and Isobel.
It might be a good thing that Sam has another boy ‘in on’ her ruse, and it seems Charlie took it well, so maybe Sam really IS in the clear
For now, at least.
I’m excited for Sam to finish off her checklist of ‘boys’ willies I need to see’ and maybe let Isobel in on some of the fun.
I really like both their personalities and how they mesh/clash.
Isobel’s ‘jealousy’ over Sam’s getting to see so many willies is adorable.
Depending on who’s left on Sam’s list, I wonder what might set them apart from what Sam has seen so far.
The escalation has been really well paced, and I’m honestly surprised at the level of suspense, given the seemingly low stakes.
Proof of your strength as a writer
All around, a very enjoyable coming of age tale.

[Robert Brooks]

The escalation has been really well paced, and I’m honestly surprised at the level of suspense, given the seemingly low stakes.
Proof of your strength as a writer

100% agree!

And it’s refreshingly ‘sweet and innocent’ in tone — though no less embarrassing, relative to the age of the characters: to whom the very idea of being seen naked (or even in their underpants!) by a girl is pretty much the most embarrassing thing a 10 / 11 year old boy can think of!

[NudeBaG]

The escalation has been really well paced, and I’m honestly surprised at the level of suspense, given the seemingly low stakes.
Proof of your strength as a writer

100% agree!

And it’s refreshingly ‘sweet and innocent’ in tone — though no less embarrassing, relative to the age of the characters: to whom the very idea of being seen naked (or even in their underpants!) by a girl is pretty much the most embarrassing thing a 10 / 11 year old boy can think of!

I was a bit different at that age, but I 100% understood those that felt this way

[BareB4U]

I’ve only recently had time to read, which has been great, as I’ve been able to binge all 8 chapters over the last couple of days

I'm glad you've enjoyed binge-reading it, and I'm only sorry for how slow a drip-feed the remainder of the story is going to feel by comparison!

I'm unfortunately finding it a struggle to even write a chapter a week at the moment. I am going to try to stick to roughly that schedule as much as I can. My problem isn't any lack of enthusiasm or inspiration, it's purely lack of available time! Writing is not a quick process for me. I'm hugely envious of writers here who seem to be able to knock out stories at lightning speed!

Indeed, it has a great plot development coupled with the constant suspense over whether Sam will get caught.

The escalation has been really well paced, and I’m honestly surprised at the level of suspense, given the seemingly low stakes.
Proof of your strength as a writer
All around, a very enjoyable coming of age tale.

Thanks guys. It's hard for me to tell how effective the suspense is (because I know roughly what's going to happen), and whether the plot getting muddled with too many characters (they are all distinct in my head, but am I writing them clearly enough?), so I'm glad it seems to be working well!

It's an inevitability that all the boys will learn Sam's secret, because she's going to turn up to school in a skirt and be introduced as the new girl in their class in just over a week's time. (Time in the story, not real world time. See above!) The question is, will anyone else find out before then and, if so, who and how?

Sam now kind of ‘owes’ both Charlie and Isobel.
It might be a good thing that Sam has another boy ‘in on’ her ruse, and it seems Charlie took it well, so maybe Sam really IS in the clear
For now, at least.
I’m excited for Sam to finish off her checklist of ‘boys’ willies I need to see’ and maybe let Isobel in on some of the fun.
I really like both their personalities and how they mesh/clash.
Isobel’s ‘jealousy’ over Sam’s getting to see so many willies is adorable.
Depending on who’s left on Sam’s list, I wonder what might set them apart from what Sam has seen so far.

Must... resist... urge... to... drop... spoilers...!

What I will say is this: Sam might 'owe' Charlie and Isobel, but not half as much as she owes Harry!

I can tell you’ve borrowed a few scenes from your true stories!

And it’s refreshingly ‘sweet and innocent’ in tone — though no less embarrassing, relative to the age of the characters: to whom the very idea of being seen naked (or even in their underpants!) by a girl is pretty much the most embarrassing thing a 10 / 11 year old boy can think of!

This was important to me from the start. If I was going to tell a story with characters these ages, I wanted to be true to that. So a lot of it is drawn from memories of what I and other kids I knew were like at around that age, and what we thought about nudity and the opposite sex. Sure, credibility can be stretched a bit for the sake of a fun story, but that tone should always be there.

I was a bit different at that age, but I 100% understood those that felt this way

Ah yes, I remember from some of your posts. Would it be fair to say you were a bit more like Yuto, only more so?

[NudeBaG]

With the ages of characters and the overall set up, I don’t see a ‘romance’ forming like in Sharing a Changing Cubicle, but there could be a bit of friendly ‘respect’?
Not quite sure how to word it atm.
IF Sam does go through with showing Harry her privates, it feels more natural that it would be more so like a “There, we’re even.”
It can still be sweet, but I don’t know if any romantic angle is required.
Just a solid friendship with an expanded ‘trust’ between the 2.

[BareB4U]

With the ages of characters and the overall set up, I don’t see a ‘romance’ forming like in Sharing a Changing Cubicle, but there could be a bit of friendly ‘respect’?
Not quite sure how to word it atm.
IF Sam does go through with showing Harry her privates, it feels more natural that it would be more so like a “There, we’re even.”
It can still be sweet, but I don’t know if any romantic angle is required.
Just a solid friendship with an expanded ‘trust’ between the 2.

There are a couple of twists and turns still to come in Harry and Sam's story. They aren't heading into the same type of relationship as Cam and Ellie did, but hopefully it will feel real and you'll be satisfied with the ending.

[BareB4U]

Part 9 – The leaking pipe

“I’m not sure why you wanted that outfit, Samantha,” her mother said. “It makes you look like a boy. I can’t wait for your hair to grow back!” Samantha winked at her sister, who gave a much more exaggerated wink back. Their mum’s comment was the whole point of the outfit, of course. Samantha was eager for her hair to grow back too, but she could wait a little longer. At least until after today.

Isobel had wanted to come with her, in the hope of seeing some boys’ willies for herself, but Samantha had firmly told her no. “No one’s going to think you’re a boy, Izzy, and you don’t have a boy’s swimming costume.” Isobel took some convincing. “That doesn’t mean you can’t take me with you?” she had pouted. “I’m young enough to be allowed in the boys’ changing room.”

She wasn’t wrong about that, but Samantha knew from the boys’ reactions the previous week that it wouldn’t get her anywhere. “Sure, Izzy, you’d be allowed in, but do you really think the boys are going to parade around stark naked with you there?” she reasoned back. “They might,” Isobel sulked, but she didn’t sound like she believed it. Samantha had to calm her by promising to tell her all about it, just like she had promised Asha.

Samantha asked her mother to drop her off outside Yuto’s house and told her there was no need to escort her to the door. Once again, Mrs Davies observed that Samantha was growing up, wanting to assert her independence and not wanting her mother to embarrass her in front of her new friends. She didn’t mind. She was glad that her daughter was making so many friends. Isobel had wanted to go too, but Mrs Davies told her she needed to give her big sister space to be with her friends. Besides, Isobel had a dance class at the same time.

“Good luck, have fun. Tell me all about it,” Isobel said, as Samantha got out the car. She meant it too. Even if she couldn’t join in the fun, she wanted her sister to see lots of naked boys so she could tell her about them. “Thanks,” said Sam. “Bye Izzy! Bye Mum!”

It was Charlie who opened the front door to Sam, having arrived there before her and being nearest when she rang the bell. He looked a little flustered to see her. “Oh, er, hi Sam,” he said. “Hi Charlie!” she replied cheerily. She didn’t need to remind him about anything. They both knew. He was a boy and she was a girl. She had seen him naked and she was going to see more boys naked today.

Sam dropped her swimming bag in the hallway. Charlie stood there awkwardly, like he wanted to say something. Before going out back to meet the others, he took hold of Sam’s arm and said quietly to her, “I’ve been, um, thinking about the other day. Did you… did you mean it when you said I had a nice, um… a nice willy?”

Sam tried not to snigger, and mostly succeeded. “Yes Charlie, I meant it,” she replied. Charlie nodded. Then, sounding more confident, he went on, “So, I was thinking some more. When we get changed for swimming today, if I show you my parts again, will you show me yours?”

“That’s not really a good deal for me, Charlie boy,” Sam chuckled, although not unkindly. “I mean, I’ve seen yours already but you haven’t seen mine.” Besides, she was already wearing Harry’s spare swim shorts under her new football shorts (having deliberately chosen a pair large enough to hide them under), which took care of changing before swimming. She also had no intention of stripping anywhere outside a private cubicle afterwards.

“Oh.” Charlie only sounded disappointed for a moment, before he shrugged and brightened up. “Can’t blame a guy for trying!” he said, and they went off to the back garden to find their friends. Sam followed him, feeling slightly bemused. She’d thought Charlie was going to threaten to tell everyone unless she agreed, but that didn’t seem to have crossed his mind.

As they had done the previous week, the boys and Sam played football for a while before it was time to go to the pool. Sam wasn’t the last to arrive this week. Yuto and Kaito were there, obviously, as well as Charlie, Theo and Nathan. Sam matched them against her mental checklist. Two willies that I’ve seen, and all three that I still need to see, she told herself.

They played three against three, with an open goal, until Max arrived and swapped places with Kaito, who once more took up his role as goalkeeper. Sam was welcomed as if they’d known her forever. She played more confidently this week and scored a few goals past Kaito. Harry and Rafi were the last of the group to arrive, which they did together, deep in discussion about comics. Sam gave them both a cheerful greeting. Rafi gave her a casual wave in return, but Harry looked especially pleased to see her. He knew that, after today, Sam had no more excuses not to show him what she had just refused to show to Charlie.

At the pool, Chloe was on the reception desk again, but there was no sign of John. It was probably for the best, though Sam. Mrs Suzuki paid their entry, and they went straight through to the changing room. A group of slightly older boys were in there, drying off, having just finished their swim. Sam cursed their timing, as she saw all the boys had already changed back into their underwear. None of them were wearing much more than that. Sam enjoyed seeing them in that state of undress, but regretted not getting into the changing room a minute or two earlier.

Nathan and Theo took changing cubicles, as they had done before, but Sam didn’t need to do the same this time. She had her swimming shorts (Well okay, Harry’s swimming shorts) on already. Changing at the benches gave her more chances to see the boys get naked.

Sam deliberately chose a spot next to Kaito, wanting to see him most of all. Yuto was on her other side. She had split the brothers up, not wanting them to block her view of each other like they had the previous week. Charlie and Max took the bench opposite, which gave her a good view of them as well. Harry and Rafi were further down the bench beyond Yuto. Sam couldn’t see either of them so well, but that was okay. She had seen both their willies before, and she was fairly certain Harry would be wearing his swimwear under his clothes again anyway.

As Harry removed his trousers, Sam saw that she wasn’t wrong. She was more surprised to see that Charlie hadn’t done the same as Harry, especially since the swimming trunks he wore would fit easily under his regular clothing. Charlie glanced at Sam as he took off his trousers to uncover the briefs her wore underneath, a pair with white and orange stripes this time. Sam figured he must’ve been serious when he suggested playing ‘I’ll show you mine if you show me yours’. Well, that wasn’t going to happen. Sam looked pointedly at Charlie’s briefs as she undressed herself, revealing her swimming shorts and showing that, unlike him, she didn’t need to change out of her underwear.

Charlie hesitated a moment. He was only down to his underwear but he was already finding this nerve-wracking. It would’ve been much better if Sam had agreed to reciprocate, but he had already decided he was going to let her see him naked again. He wanted her to know that she saw him because HE was in control, not because she tricked him. She’d already seen everything he had, so showing her again should be easy, he told himself. He had nothing more to lose and plenty of self-respect to gain.

Yet now the moment was here, Charlie realised there was a huge difference between Sam seeing his privates when he wasn’t aware she was a girl, and showing them to her, now that he WAS aware. It was embarrassing that time he showed Lucy, and this was no less embarrassing, but he couldn’t back down now. That would only reaffirm Sam’s victory over him. He pulled his briefs down quickly, as casually as he could.

Max, to Charlie’s left, was taking off his own underwear at the same time. Max, who had freaked out when a girl saw him naked in the showers, unaware that a girl was looking at him equally naked right now, was changing calmly without a care. Charlie knew that he had to appear equally calm, as if it didn’t matter that a girl, soon to be his classmate, was looking at his willy and his balls. Why had he thought this wouldn’t be embarrassing? He couldn’t bring himself to look at Sam directly, but he could see out of the corner of his vision that she was watching him, and she wasn’t watching his face.

Sam enjoyed the unexpected treat of seeing Charlie’s boy parts again. She couldn’t work out why he was just letting her see everything, but she wasn’t going to look a gift horse in the mouth, not when she could look at a gift willy instead. Two willies, in fact. She thought about how Asha had asked about the boys’ relative sizes and shapes. Charlie and Max had the two longest willies of the boys Sam had seen so far, although Max’s was thicker. Asha had wanted to know how Kaito measured up. Sam glanced to her right, but Kaito still had on the tracksuit trousers he’d been wearing.

Charlie’s embarrassment was threatening to get the better of him. A voice at the back of his mind demanded to know what he thought he was doing, going NAKED in front of a GIRL! Charlie turned his back to Sam, accepting the lesser embarrassment of letting her see his bum, and quickly stepped into his swimming trunks. He hoped he still managed to appear relaxed, but he didn’t feel it. For the first time in Charlie’s life, his trunks seemed like they didn’t provide enough cover or leave enough to the imagination. Even with them on, he felt as if he were still naked in front of Sam. Now he regretted showing her his whole body again.

Max was still showing all of his own body, and he was starting to get concerned. “Has anyone seen my shorts?” he asked, rummaging through a pile of clothes and towels on the bench. “No shorts? Guess you’re swimming nekkid!” teased Yuto, who was almost naked himself. Sam sat down on the bench to watch the boys, making a show of looking through her own pile of clothes in case Max’s shorts had somehow ended up among them.

In his cubicle, Theo heard the others all laughing. He wished he was joining in. Nine words stopped him. Nine words that had haunted Theo for months. “Hey Theo, we can all see your tiny willy!” That was what Asha, a girl in his class, had said, when Max had pulled Theo’s shorts and underwear down. All the other girls had laughed, and so had a few of the boys. It was true, he did have the smallest willy of all the boys in the class, and now everyone knew it. It hadn’t helped that the boy who pantsed him had the biggest willy in the class, not that any of the girls had known THAT.

It had become a running joke. Whenever he changed with the other boys afterwards, it seemed someone or other would repeat those terrible words, “Hey Theo, we can all see your tiny willy!” and the others would laugh. They had felt sorry for him, and tried to resist teasing him, but one of them would always crack. Eventually Theo had stopped getting naked around them entirely. Now no one could see his tiny willy.

In the cubicle next to Theo’s, Nathan had his own reason for not showing his willy to the others. He had told his classmates he was gay, and they’d said they didn’t care about that. They were still happy to change with him. Nathan had been grateful for that, but he couldn’t do it. He had started getting erections, both from the sight of other boys naked, and from knowing they were seeing him naked too. He hadn’t told his friends about THAT. Maybe they would still be understanding, but he feared they wouldn’t be. Besides, it was too embarrassing for Nathan to talk about it.

He had stayed completely soft when his sister had ripped his towel off, for the whole time he had been exposed to her and her two friends. Being naked in front of girls had been simply humiliating, there was no excitement to it at all for Nathan. Being naked in front of BOYS, on the other hand… His willy usually behaved itself for as long as it was constrained by his underpants or his swimming trunks, but as soon as it was freed, it tended to grow stiff within a matter of seconds. He wished it wouldn’t keep doing that.

But it was doing that now, as Nathan pulled down his underpants, just from HEARING the others joking about Max being naked and having to skinny-dip. Nathan sighed, and reached for his trunks, but his thoughts were interrupted by a drop of water falling in front of him and splashing off his leg.

As naked as Nathan, in the cubicle next door, Theo looked down between his legs at the source of his shame. Then he jumped, feeling something cold hit the back of his neck. He looked around. He was still alone. Then he felt it again, this time on the top of his head. It was a drop of water. He looked up and saw the water pipe which ran along the ceiling was leaking. Water was beginning to drip down on him, faster and faster. The water seemed clean, but it was cold and unpleasant. The drips turned into a steady trickle, raining down on him. Theo recoiled from it, grabbed his swimming shorts and back-peddled out of the cubicle.

Sam was distracted from Max’s naked search for his missing swim shorts by Theo’s unexpected emergence from the cubicle. Theo was one of the three boys still on her checklist to see, and he had burst out in front of her naked! He held his swim shorts protectively in front of himself, but Sam was looking at much more of his body than she had seen before, including his rather large, rounded bum.

“What’s up, Theo?” Kaito asked, from right next to Sam. There were so many places for her to look right now, she was spoiled for choice. Sam turned on the bench to check out Kaito again and came face-to-face with a pair of jockey shorts. Kaito was standing up in front of the bench and his crotch was at Sam’s eye level. Here was a second willy on her checklist! It was covered, but it was mere inches from her eyes and she could make out most of the shape of it. Kaito’s willy didn’t seem small to her, and nor did the fat pair of balls accompanying it. She would be able to assure Asha of that.

“I’m getting rained on!” Theo complained, still clutching his shorts to his groin. “It’s true,” confirmed Nathan, emerging from his own cubicle (in his swimming trunks, Sam was disappointed to notice) and wiping drops of water from his forehead.

“Where?” Harry asked sceptically, walking over to the cubicle. “Right there,” Theo indicated, pointing at the pipe. “Ah, it’s only a couple of drips,” Harry said. “Come on Theo, it’s not that bad. Show some balls!” Sam remembered turning those words against Harry in the past. She kept a close eye on Theo’s barely covered front. Yes, she thought. Come on Theo, show me some balls!

“No, wait. Watch!” Theo insisted to Harry. The trickle of water had indeed slowed to a series of drips again, but it sped up as they watched. “You see!” he said, gesticulating with both arms. “We see, alright,” Charlie said pointedly. “Hey Theo, we can all see your willy.” Theo hadn’t been concentrating on preserving his modesty. He’d accidentally uncovered himself while gesturing at the pipe.

Theo blushed red, covered himself again, ran into another cubicle and quickly slammed the door. He felt more dripping water in there, but at least it wasn’t as bad as in the cubicle he left. There they were again, those words that kept torturing him. He was thankful that Charlie had missed out the word ‘tiny’ this time, but the jibe still stung. Would he ever be rid of it?

Charlie hated making the tease. He knew Theo was still sensitive about the time girls had seen his willy, but that was WHY he’d had to do it. It was the quickest, surest way of getting Theo to hide his private parts from Sam, and save him from more embarrassment when he eventually found out she was a girl. He knew Max would be pretty mortified when he found out too, but it was too late for Max. It wasn’t too late for Theo, he hoped.

Sam didn’t like Charlie teasing Theo either, because it had worked. She had only the briefest of looks at Theo’s uncovered privates before he had hidden them again, but the important thing was she HAD managed to see them clearly, even if only for a moment. Asha hadn’t been exaggerating about Theo. His willy did indeed look very small, smaller even than Yuto’s. It was perched on top of what seemed a large ball sack by comparison. Theo certainly had ‘shown some balls’, just not much else!

Theo came back out of the cubicle a moment later, his long board shorts now on his body, covering him from his waist to below his knees. Such a large garment to hide such a little willy, but he still looked quite cute naked, Sam thought. She didn’t understand Asha’s belief that bigger willies were automatically better. Sam liked seeing the variety and found all of them interesting to look at. One boy down, two to go, said her mental checklist. That reminded her that Kaito was next to her. She looked to her right, just in time to see Kaito’s bum for a second before it disappeared into his swimming jammers. After that close-up tease of him in his underwear, Sam was dismayed at having missed Kaito’s full-frontal nudity once again!

She looked along the bench to her left. Yuto and Rafi had also now joined the others in being dressed in their swimwear. She had missed them getting naked too! Harry, of course, had had his swim shorts on all along. Only Max was still nude, searching increasingly desperately for his shorts. Wait, thought Sam. Yuto isn’t wearing his own swimwear. He’s wearing…

Max noticed too. “Hey, those are MY shorts!” he complained. Everybody laughed. “I found them on the bench,” Yuto explained. “I was wondering how long it’d take you to notice!” He took the shorts off and handed them over to Max. Sam was pleased to see Yuto was naked underneath. She hadn’t missed out on seeing his willy again, after all. Max was less pleased. “I’m not sure I want to wear these, now they’ve had your willy and balls pressed up inside them,” he grumbled, but he took them anyway and put them on. Yuto laughed and put on his own jammers.

Now they were all ready, they put their clothes and towels into the lockers and headed out to the pool. Most of them jumped right in, but Charlie went to talk to a member of staff. He found Tom, the manager, by the side of a lane of the pool that had been roped off. Tom was in a pair of red board shorts and had been about to lead a swimming class. “Excuse me, mister,” Charlie said. “There’s a leaky pipe in the guys’ changing room. I figured you should know.”

“Ugh. Show me, kid. Take over for me, would you, John?” The lifeguard, in an identical pair of board shorts, jumped down from his raised chair to take Tom’s place. Charlie, in his similarly red but much skimpier trunks, once again felt underdressed. Sam looking at his naked body continued to prey on his mind, and it had been his own fault this time.

Pushing those thoughts to the back of his mind, Charlie went with Tom back to the changing room and showed him the leaking pipe. Tom looked annoyed. “Well, I can call a plumber, but those cubicles are going to be out of order until they arrive,” he said out loud, to himself more than to Charlie.

They returned to the pool. Tom went to a store cupboard and returned to the changing room, carrying a roll of thick warning tape, with ‘Out Of Order – Do Not Enter’ written on it. Charlie left him to it. He jumped in the water close to where the others were fooling around, trying to swim underneath each other. Sam was secretly enjoying swimming between the boys’ legs, looking up at their swimsuits as she did so.

When he got the chance, Charlie swam across to Theo and Nathan, to let them both know that the manager had taped off out to tape off the cubicles. Theo and Nathan were both worried by this development, knowing it meant they wouldn’t be able to change privately after they got out of the pool.

Charlie, on the other hand, was secretly pleased. He knew it meant that neither would Sam…

[NudeBaG]

Part 9 – The leaking pipe


Charlie, on the other hand, was secretly pleased. He knew it meant that neither would Sam…

Oh no!
Is this game over?
lol
Brilliant writing and set up!
But surely, Sam CANNOT be exposed before her Willy checklist is complete!
Right?

[BareB4U]

You'll have to wait and see!