How Jacqui Saw Me Naked

[EverythingOff]

That's a good point. You're right. It's just an error in continuity. I don't really outline these stories in advance. I might have a general idea, but when I start typing a chapter, just whatever comes out, comes out. So these kinds of things get mixed up sometimes. That said, I really do appreciate when a reader points that kind of thing out, because they are usually very easy to go back and fix... which I will do now.

And I'm glad you're enjoying the story! I'm looking forward to the stripping too! (As is Laura!)

[Freesub]

Well written, even if I am mildly disappointed you stuck to the purist route.

I suppose it is significantly harder to write if he did win too, would require a great deal of skill and time to figure out how to progress the story instead of it just ending after he sees her.

[EverythingOff]

Well written, even if I am mildly disappointed you stuck to the purist route.

Thank you. Yeah, sorry. That's not to say she won't let him see her in the story. But it's not yet.

I suppose it is significantly harder to write if he did win too, would require a great deal of skill and time to figure out how to progress the story instead of it just ending after he sees her.

I don't think it would be harder to write. It just takes a different path. The fact that he sees her wouldn't change the trajectory. The difference is that if she were to let him look at her, it would be on her own terms. It wouldn't be ENF at all. She would be completely in control of what he was seeing and when. If anything, it would only increase her power over him.

"I'll show you this part of me now, and you can look at it for this long. And if you continue to be a good boy and do exactly what I say, I might give you another treat. But you'll have to earn it. Do you understand?"

"Yes, Jacqui. I understand."

"Very good, James. Very good."

The power remains completely hers, even if she gives him a look. It's hers to give, not his to take. Which is the opposite of his nudity, which she is taking whether or not he wants her to.

[NudeBaG]

Excited for this to continue

[EverythingOff]

It will. I wrote the next chapter, but then I reread it and Jacqui was starting to come off kind of mean, and that's not true to her character. So I will revise and review.

[Datom]

This is excellent! i really like the way you're working with the characters, keeping them balanced. You're handling them very skillfully. At first Jacqui was the dominant one, but now they've balanced out. So she's not a villain at all, but a friend who leads him through some adventurous scenarios.

[Brett]

I think he should start by waiting on the pool table wearing the towel for her arrival so she can check by looking up under the towel before the full exposure

[EverythingOff]

I think he should start by waiting on the pool table wearing the towel for her arrival so she can check by looking up under the towel before the full exposure

Love it! But when you say she can check, do you mean Jacqui or Laura? And check for what?

[EverythingOff]

This is excellent! i really like the way you're working with the characters, keeping them balanced. You're handling them very skillfully. At first Jacqui was the dominant one, but now they've balanced out. So she's not a villain at all, but a friend who leads him through some adventurous scenarios.

Yeah, she is absolutely not a villain. But she is having a lot of fun intentionally embarrassing him, but mostly because she just thinks it's fun and he's cute. Never to be mean. (Well, maybe a little mean, but never cruel.)

[docknumber]

Rereading the story, can’t wait for the next part.