BareB4U wrote: Thu Oct 23, 2025 6:10 pm
I agree it would probably feel wrong in this story. Especially since Jacqui seemed to understand James's humiliation over his shrinkage and agreed to no photos or videos of him in that state. I also get the impression that James isn't totally submissive and is only willing to be pushed so far, without it souring the budding relationship between them.
Right. Just need the right thing at the right time. I think it's not right for this story, at least at this point. I'd never rule it out for good, but I don't think we'll see it in the next chapter, at least. I agree. James is in it only as far as he's enjoying it. Nobody's forcing him to do anything. And if Jacqui were to push him too far, he would sour on their relationship and friendship. And there would go the whole story.
On a different point, I don't know if you meant to leave it in, but there's a line in this chapter where James says he's "back at 60 minutes", but then next thing he's down to 46. I don't remember reading that there was any way for him to earn minutes back through "good behaviour", but I like the idea of it! I think it would be a fun incentive for him to get more into the spirit of the girls' games! Otherwise he seems to be on an inexorable countdown to zero. Which would be very sad for both him and Jacqui!
Thanks for catching that. It was an error. In a previous draft, I had done what you suspected, and I had Jacqui adding minutes back for good cooperation. But it was adding unnecessary complexity to the story, so I dropped it. I just missed that one reference. But I've gone back and made the edit. Thanks for pointing it out.
Also, like others have said, great cliffhanger.
I appreciate it! The next chapter should be a lot of fun... and also kind of sweet.
Thankfully, Jacqui had a decent sized backyard. I was hiding behind a big tree near the back fence. There was plenty of cover, and the neighbors wouldn't be able to see. Hopefully Jacqui and Laura could get rid of Laura's sister Laila before she found me. And all the excitement was making me hard again!
Laila was four years ahead of us. She was in high school. I mean, she drove and everything! Plus, living next door to her and Laura, I would see her all the time. So it was bad enough that Laura was seeing me naked. I was going to have to live with that. But if Laila saw me? I was just a little kid to her. That would be really embarrassing! I was just hoping they could get rid of her quickly.
I listened carefully. The gate opened and Laila came in.
It was hard to make out from the distance, but I heard Laila say, "Laura. Jacqui. What are you doing with that sprinkler, running around like you're in preschool!"
"Yeah, I know. It's dumb," Jacqui said, trying to cover. "We were watching some old videos on Laura's phone and it reminded us of when we used to play in the sprinkler. That's all."
Laila didn't seem to care all that much. "Okay. Whatever. Laura, we need to get home. It's getting late, and you've got that performance tonight."
Laura played clarinet in the school band.
They started walking closer to the house. I couldn't really hear what they were saying, but it seemed that they were going to be able to get rid of Laila before she found me. Then—and boy was I thankful—I heard Laura and Laila say bye to Jacqui, and the gate closed. My heart was pounding.
Jacqui came running back to me behind the tree. She was smiling and out of breath.
"That was a close one!" she said.
Then all of a sudden, she noticed I was naked. Like in the excitement, she had forgotten. She took a minute and looked at me. She seemed to like what she saw. It was nice. I could do without being naked in front of Laura. And I certainly wasn't looking forward to Christine and Tracy coming over. But I didn't mind Jacqui seeing me naked anymore. I actually kind of liked it. She made me feel really good inside when she'd look at me. And that was nice. Don't get me wrong. I'd be happy to get dressed. But I wasn't so scared of being naked in front of her anymore. It still made me nervous, but in a good way, if that makes sense.
Jacqui leaned in and she gave me a little peck on the lips. Then she took me by the hand and we ran back to the rec room. As we were running, Jacqui said, "Okay, James. My mom's going to be home soon. You run upstairs and go take a shower. You're all muddy from the sprinkler. Your clothes are in the closet outside the bathroom. You know, where the princess backpack was." She shot me a sly smile. "You looked cute in that princess backpack!"
I blushed. I kind of wanted to forget about that.
"Anyway, run up and take a shower and get dressed. I'll go shower in the house. Then maybe I can ask my mom if you can stay for dinner... if you want... I mean... would you want to stay for dinner?" She was shy about it.
"Yeah. Absolutely. Dinner sounds great."
She smiled and gave me another little kiss. This was pretty cool!
Jacqui was about to run into the house, but then she stopped herself. She got this mischievous look.
She said, "Or... I could come up to the rec room... and watch you take a shower." She really looked like she was hoping I'd say yes. And suddenly, I got all flushed and embarrassed again. I couldn't figure out why. She'd been looking at me naked all afternoon, but for some reason, showering seemed awfully personal.
"Um, I don't know, Jacqui."
She held my hand and looked at me.
"Tell you what, James. I won't make you. But I'll walk up with you. Just don't decide yet. Once we're in the bathroom, you can decide. If you want, I'll stay in and watch you shower. If not, I'll go into the house and I'll shower and change. It's totally up to you, okay?"
Wow. Did I want her to watch me take a shower? That felt weird. But maybe it would be exciting. Then I thought, maybe if I let her watch me, she'd let me watch her! After all, I did have those Naked Jacqui minutes (although I wasn't quite sure if she'd ever really let me redeem them). I was way too shy to ask, but I thought maybe there was a way to make it happen.
We walked up the steps to the rec room, still holding hands. Her hand felt so good. I had almost forgotten I was all naked.
As we walked toward the bathroom, I started to get really nervous. I was thinking I'd let her watch me take a shower. It made me all tingly, and I was definitely getting hard. Jacqui noticed.
She smiled and said, "Am I making you nervous?"
I said, "Yeah." I turned a little red, I think.
It was pretty much all the way hard.
I was still too shy to tell Jacqui I wanted her to watch me shower. But I figured I'd work up the courage somehow.
Jacqui was holding my hand tight. I liked it. With my other hand, I pushed open the door to the bathroom. And as soon as I pushed it all the way open...
"SURPRISE!!!"
Oh my god!!! Laura and Laila were standing there, smiling and laughing at me! They had been hiding in the bathroom the whole time! Jacqui wouldn't let go of my hand so I couldn't cover. I tried to cover with my left hand, but she grabbed that one too! And then she kicked the door closed! I was trapped naked in the bathroom with Jacqui, Laura, and Laila!
Laila was laughing pretty good. "Yeah, James! Laura was right! You look just like when you'd come over and play naked in the sprinkler with Laura!" Then she looked down at my hard penis, and said, "Well, almost just like!"
I looked at Laura, and she had her phone out! She was taking video of the whole thing!
Jacqui let go of my hands and practically fell on the floor, laughing. I immediately tried to cover—not that I could cover the whole thing in this state, but I did my best.
Laila just said, "Okay, James. Very nice. I always wondered how you might shape up. So there it is. Very nice. You've done well for yourself," she laughed, staring right at it the whole time.
Jacqui looked up at me and said, "Oh my god, James! You should have seen your face when they yelled 'Surprise!!!'"
Then Laura said, "Well, we can remember it over and over, because I've got it all on video!"
"You have got to send it to me!" Jacqui pleaded.
"Oh, don't worry. I'll send you the whole album with everything from today!"
They were just sharing these naked pics of me like it was just pictures from a trip to the mall or something! And all three of them were laughing pretty hard. And I was just in shock. Laila had seen me naked??? Oh my god!!! She's in high school!!!
Finally, pulling herself together, Laila said, "Okay, James. Thanks for the show. That was a real treat! Now, Laura, we need to get going. You need to get cleaned up and I need to get you back up to school."
I was finally allowed to cover up with a towel, and Laura and Laila left.
Jacqui and I were alone.
Neither of us said anything for a moment.
Then she said, "So... you gonna take that shower?"
I was super nervous. "Um, yeah. Did you wanna... um... you know..."
"Watch?"
I nodded.
Then she nodded.
I opened the shower curtain wide and turned on the water. Jacqui leaned against the vanity. She looked amazing in that bikini. She was wide eyed and sweet. Just waiting... and watching.
I checked the water temperature. It was fine.
I stepped into the shower.
* * * * *
Afterwards, Jacqui handed me a towel. I dried off. Before I got dressed, she kissed me again. This time for a little longer. It made me hard again. Jacqui looked down at it, then back into my eyes. Another little kiss.
She brought me over to the closet and handed me my clothes. Then she started walking away as I got dressed. It felt good to have clothes on again. Really good.
I turned and saw Jacqui. She was over by the couch. She was real still.
"Come here, James."
I walked over. We were both very aware of the change in dynamic—I was now fully dressed, while she was just wearing that skimpy bikini.
She took both my hands in hers. We were looking at each other. I didn't know if she was going to kiss me, or what.
She said, "You've been a real good sport this afternoon, you know? I hope it wasn't too much. I hope it was fun."
I was able to actually laugh at it a bit now. "Yeah, Jacqui. It was fun... mostly. Don't get me wrong. I could have done without the princess backpack. And yeah. I've never been more embarrassed in my life..."
She interrupted. "Not even in the exam room yesterday?"
"My god. Was that just yesterday?"
We laughed a little laugh.
Then she said, in a kind of teasing voice, "You know, of course, I'm still planning to embarrass you in front of Christine and Tracy. You know that, right?"
"I was hoping you'd forgotten about that."
"Nope. You're way too cute when you're embarrassed. I think embarrassing you and making you nervous is going to be my new hobby."
I smiled. I suddenly felt like the luckiest kid in the world.
Then she let go of my hands. She turned away from me. And oh my god. She took off her bikini top. My heart practically stopped. Then, still facing away from me, she undid the little bows on either side of her bikini bottom, and it gently fell to the floor. She was naked! I was looking at her completely naked from the back. I was seeing everything. I had seen a glimpse of her butt in the mirror before, but this was different. Totally different. Oh my god.
She turned around and faced me. Her left arm was covering her chest, and her right hand was covering between her legs. Her face was so beautiful. She took a step toward me. I think I almost fainted.
My throat was dry. I could barely get the words out. "What are you doing???"
"Well, James," she said, slowly taking another step even closer to me, "if I remember correctly, I believe you've got 46 minutes of Naked Jacqui time."
She smiled the best smile ever.
Yeah.
I was definitely the luckiest kid in the world.
The End
Last edited by EverythingOff on Sun Nov 02, 2025 2:04 pm, edited 2 times in total.
NudeBaG wrote: Sun Oct 26, 2025 2:01 pm
Now we need THAT chapter!
Which chapter? The Naked Jacqui time?
I was wondering whether to go into that, or just let the story rest here. It seems like a natural conclusion, at least for now. I love the characters and would love to continue writing them, and there are PLENTY more ways Jacqui can embarrass him in front of Christine, Tracy, and others.
But if we get into the Naked Jacqui time, does that really go on the ENM board? And of course, it's not a moment of embarrassment for her. It's really just sweet exploration. So I don't know how well that fits in with the theme of the site.
She also said she'd let him play naked Simon Says with her, and that would be more ENF than ENM. I don't know how strict people like to keep that kind of separation here.
NudeBaG wrote: Sun Oct 26, 2025 2:01 pm
Now we need THAT chapter!
Which chapter? The Naked Jacqui time?
I was wondering whether to go into that, or just let the story rest here. It seems like a natural conclusion, at least for now. I love the characters and would love to continue writing them, and there are PLENTY more ways Jacqui can embarrass him in front of Christine, Tracy, and others.
But if we get into the Naked Jacqui time, does that really go on the ENM board? And of course, it's not a moment of embarrassment for her. It's really just sweet exploration. So I don't know how well that fits in with the theme of the site.
She also said she'd let him play naked Simon Says with her, and that would be more ENF than ENM. I don't know how strict people like to keep that kind of separation here.
It could stay here, or you could post it on the ENF board, but I don’t think Jackie is embarrassed
I think, if this is where you want to end it, that’s fine.
Maybe give a little epilogue?
Other than that, you have the future option of showing him off to more of their friends, but personally, I think you should shift back to finishing some of your other works.
NudeBaG wrote: Sun Oct 26, 2025 2:13 pm
I think, if this is where you want to end it, that’s fine.
Maybe give a little epilogue?
Other than that, you have the future option of showing him off to more of their friends,
I think this is a good place to stop the story, at least for now. It's had a nice arc, from initial exposure, to prolonged embarrassment, to first love. So it's a sweet story, and I think this is fine for now. There's certainly opportunity for future adventures for both of them to get naked, but I think for this part of the story anyway, it's a fitting and sweet conclusion.
but personally, I think you should shift back to finishing some of your other works.
Yes. I've got the last part of the Freshman Show almost ready to release. Probably in the next couple of days, hopefully. Then after that, back to Haley and Bella. Need to wait for inspiration to strike for that one. I need to reread it, too. It's been a few weeks!
