Samantha Uncontrolled (Ch.25 - 5/5)

[Hooked6]

FABULOUS ADDITION!! I have been hopping that Sam would get caught naked at work by Marcela as she has such a playful attitude and outlook. This was so wonderfully written that I can wait for the next installment! It's like a dream come true!

I wanted to point out an inconsistency, however, in this chapter that conflicts with several previous chapters that you might want to look into and correct if you need you wouldn't mind.

You wrote:

My hands trembled violently at my sides. I wanted to cross my arms over my breasts, cover the dark triangle between my thighs, but I remembered Valeria's order and lowered them again, feeling the blush burning from my neck to the tips of my breasts. The icy air caressed my exposed sex, and a wave of involuntary moisture made me grit my teeth in disgust at myself.


In this chapter, you have written that Sam has a full bush - "a dark triangle between her thighs," as you put it, but in several previous chapters Sam is COMPLETELY SHAVED in her pubic area - something that Megan, Carla and Valeria went to great lengths to point out and used that fact to humiliate and embarrass her several times.

I think it might be better to keep Sam shaved (as she already exists in my mind that way ) and keep things consistent.


You are a masterful writer, and I enjoy your work tremendously.

Hooked6

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[mcenf]

FABULOUS ADDITION!! I have been hopping that Sam would get caught naked at work by Marcela as she has such a playful attitude and outlook. This was so wonderfully written that I can wait for the next installment! It's like a dream come true!

I wanted to point out an inconsistency, however, in this chapter that conflicts with several previous chapters that you might want to look into and correct if you need you wouldn't mind.

You wrote:

My hands trembled violently at my sides. I wanted to cross my arms over my breasts, cover the dark triangle between my thighs, but I remembered Valeria's order and lowered them again, feeling the blush burning from my neck to the tips of my breasts. The icy air caressed my exposed sex, and a wave of involuntary moisture made me grit my teeth in disgust at myself.


In this chapter, you have written that Sam has a full bush - "a dark triangle between her thighs," as you put it, but in several previous chapters Sam is COMPLETELY SHAVED in her pubic area - something that Megan, Carla and Valeria went to great lengths to point out and used that fact to humiliate and embarrass her several times.

I think it might be better to keep Sam shaved (as she already exists in my mind that way ) and keep things consistent.


You are a masterful writer, and I enjoy your work tremendously.

Hooked6

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Thank you so much for letting me know! You're absolutely right, it was an inconsistency. I've already corrected the chapter so Sam is completely shaved like before.

I really appreciate you pointing it out!

[Moonshine+CC21]

So glad you're back mate. Missed seeing new chapters since well I like the series and yeah don't know what else I can say