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[josh]

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[ely]

it is the first enf story with stop time that I have found. Very good.

Maybe I'm wrong, but you haven't explained how the guy starts time again after stopping it

[Fantastic 4]

A very standard time stop story. As this is one of my personal favorites, I would love to see more. Keep going and good job with this one!

[Executionus]

Nice little story. It's so rare to see any stories with supernatural elements, and this one was well done. There's always a ton of potential with time stop.

[DrWhoFanJ]

Maybe I'm wrong, but you haven't explained how the guy starts time again after stopping it

He has; he does the blinking again:

if I close my eyes and focus real good I can stop time completely until I do it again.

(my bold).

[karotte]

Thank you for the fun story. Some remarks:

1.) He starts looking at the girls when he is collecting the clothes, which is also the expected behavior. I assume touching their bodies is not an option because of the "frozen time rules" (the bodies should feel like a solid statue) - but doesn't he even try touching them? I think the description of their bodies should be done in the same paragraph to increase the immersion. The part where the girls are walking out of the locker room should then focus only on their posture (how they cover up and how effective it is).
2.) Where do the mobile phones / cameras suddenly come from during their "walk of shame"? Except the main character no one should know about his plans - or am I wrong? I know, the youth nowadays can't live without their smartphones - but carrying them around after having changed for swimming lessons sounds a little impractical - and I think the teacher might also not be very amused if everyone carries his/her smartphone.