mikewozere wrote: Mon May 05, 2025 9:27 pm
Will this story be continued at some point?
I couldn't get into the Samantha Uncontrolled one, but really liked this one.
Thank you for your interest and for taking the time to comment.
My intention is to finish both stories—Amy's and Samantha's. I'm currently working on giving Sam's story a proper ending, and once that's done, I'll continue with this one.
Both are already in their final stretch, but due to limited free time in my personal life, it might still take a little while to complete them. I really appreciate your patience and support!
Good news that you are still working on the stories. It's much better to take the time to do them justice than to rush and truncate things. I am more invested in Samantha's story but both deserve to be continued and ultimately reach a satisfying conclusion.
I haven't read any of Samantha's story yet, but I have now read all of Amy's story (that has been posted as of the time of this comment). I like the story, but I really feel that Amy's luck needs to run out soon. A criticism that I started to feel towards this story midway through is that it feels a bit repetitive after a while. The story at large can be summed up like this:
Amy gets naked and does a stealth challenge.
Next day: Another naked stealth challenge
Next day: Another naked stealth challenge
Next day: Another naked stealth challenge
So on and so fourth...
Despite the tension and stakes, there are never any consequences or any narrative payoff or plot progression from these challenges. I feel like at least one of the following needs to happen:
1. Someone significant finally catches Amy naked during one of these challenges (e.g. her mom, a teacher or the principal, Julie, a police officer, etc...). The consequences would likely be dire for Amy, but at least this would actually move the story along and provide some narrative payoff.
2. Amy grows a spine and simply says that she is done with Megan and Julia's bull crap. Amy refuses to do any more challenges. This may result in Megan and Julia publishing the photos and videos, but this would still at least progress the story and Amy's character. You could have this happen just after Amy learns that the contest is fake, or you could have her learn that at a separate time.
3. A serious conversation between Amy and Julie, and perhaps that teacher or principal that Julie talked to, needs to take place. A similar conversation between Amy and her mom would suffice too. Basically, Amy needs to tell someone who genuinely cares about her what is going on. Amy clearly needs help, and I believe that this helps could actually move the story along.
Basically, I am saying that something major needs to happen. As things have gone thus far, this story is less like a grand narrative, and more like an episodic TV sitcom where each episode is just its own little self contained story (kind of like episodes of SpongeBob).
Mate I love this. Goes on a bit in chapter wise, hard going when you ain't skim reading. But thats not really a bad thing. I really do prefer this over the Samantha one. Not that the Samantha one is bad because it's not it's just not my style of setting. But I do like how Amy gets some revenge just makes me think if Megan will keep her word on that whatever Amy does to Samantha there won't be no repercussions to Amy.
Also I prefer the Amy one because she's vulnerable whereas Samantha should've remained sensible and not strip naked the first time. But atleast its quite satisfying seeing Samantha in the same position since ofcourse she didn't really help Amy when she was naked in the office.
But anyway I'm so wondering how Amy is gonna get exposed to her whole school, i mean she seems to of come to terms with it but obviously that won't make her any less embarrassed. And will Julie get stripped or something I mean she comes every now and then as Amy's friend but I wonder if she's gonna get the same treatment right at the end. And will Megan and Julia be smart enough to expose Amy infront of everyone without getting in trouble themselves.
Will the teachers punish Amy by making attend naked at all times. Will her mum be not very understanding and decide to make Amy be naked at all times. Or will she be you know like a normal mother and comfort her daughter.
So much to find out and look forward to and I'm here for it. Good job on what's been written so far.
Moonshine+CC21 wrote: Wed Jul 23, 2025 9:23 pm
Mate I love this. Goes on a bit in chapter wise, hard going when you ain't skim reading. But thats not really a bad thing. I really do prefer this over the Samantha one. Not that the Samantha one is bad because it's not it's just not my style of setting. But I do like how Amy gets some revenge just makes me think if Megan will keep her word on that whatever Amy does to Samantha there won't be no repercussions to Amy.
Also I prefer the Amy one because she's vulnerable whereas Samantha should've remained sensible and not strip naked the first time. But atleast its quite satisfying seeing Samantha in the same position since ofcourse she didn't really help Amy when she was naked in the office.
But anyway I'm so wondering how Amy is gonna get exposed to her whole school, i mean she seems to of come to terms with it but obviously that won't make her any less embarrassed. And will Julie get stripped or something I mean she comes every now and then as Amy's friend but I wonder if she's gonna get the same treatment right at the end. And will Megan and Julia be smart enough to expose Amy infront of everyone without getting in trouble themselves.
Will the teachers punish Amy by making attend naked at all times. Will her mum be not very understanding and decide to make Amy be naked at all times. Or will she be you know like a normal mother and comfort her daughter.
So much to find out and look forward to and I'm here for it. Good job on what's been written so far.
yeah Amy might end up in a Naked punishment, and I do not think her mother is going to be very comforting from what seen so far about her mother.