mikewozere wrote: Mon May 05, 2025 9:27 pm
Will this story be continued at some point?
I couldn't get into the Samantha Uncontrolled one, but really liked this one.
Thank you for your interest and for taking the time to comment.
My intention is to finish both stories—Amy's and Samantha's. I'm currently working on giving Sam's story a proper ending, and once that's done, I'll continue with this one.
Both are already in their final stretch, but due to limited free time in my personal life, it might still take a little while to complete them. I really appreciate your patience and support!
Good news that you are still working on the stories. It's much better to take the time to do them justice than to rush and truncate things. I am more invested in Samantha's story but both deserve to be continued and ultimately reach a satisfying conclusion.
I haven't read any of Samantha's story yet, but I have now read all of Amy's story (that has been posted as of the time of this comment). I like the story, but I really feel that Amy's luck needs to run out soon. A criticism that I started to feel towards this story midway through is that it feels a bit repetitive after a while. The story at large can be summed up like this:
Amy gets naked and does a stealth challenge.
Next day: Another naked stealth challenge
Next day: Another naked stealth challenge
Next day: Another naked stealth challenge
So on and so fourth...
Despite the tension and stakes, there are never any consequences or any narrative payoff or plot progression from these challenges. I feel like at least one of the following needs to happen:
1. Someone significant finally catches Amy naked during one of these challenges (e.g. her mom, a teacher or the principal, Julie, a police officer, etc...). The consequences would likely be dire for Amy, but at least this would actually move the story along and provide some narrative payoff.
2. Amy grows a spine and simply says that she is done with Megan and Julia's bull crap. Amy refuses to do any more challenges. This may result in Megan and Julia publishing the photos and videos, but this would still at least progress the story and Amy's character. You could have this happen just after Amy learns that the contest is fake, or you could have her learn that at a separate time.
3. A serious conversation between Amy and Julie, and perhaps that teacher or principal that Julie talked to, needs to take place. A similar conversation between Amy and her mom would suffice too. Basically, Amy needs to tell someone who genuinely cares about her what is going on. Amy clearly needs help, and I believe that this helps could actually move the story along.
Basically, I am saying that something major needs to happen. As things have gone thus far, this story is less like a grand narrative, and more like an episodic TV sitcom where each episode is just its own little self contained story (kind of like episodes of SpongeBob).